Dennis Johnson my critique of Ameena's poem Hello Nice to Meet You

Your poem has a very distinct voice. Innocent? The poem reads like a classic story. A very identifiable outline that concludes with same excitement it began with. It would be noteworthy that I could literally see the scenes pop in my head in vivid detail. From one scene to another it effortlessly sets up the encounter and incorporates the thoughts of the subject at the conclusion.I don't know if this is a good suggestion or if you should disregarded like roadkill. I think in some cases it is good to use the actual dialogue. For example if you are going to write” I answer casually”, then you might as well write what your casual answer is about yourself. The rule of thumb is, if you have a chance to show it, then show it, don’t tell it. Traditionally the poem has elements in it that far exceed the average. The mood of the piece is inviting. The ability to make it conversational in its tone is brilliant. You were able to add an emotional responsibility of the person who is smitten and the joy of stalking on Facebook is both daring and contemporary. You almost made it honorable as if to say "we all have done it so there is no shame in my game". I did become a little interested in why women have to play cool. I mean they really have all the power, or at least most of it the area of attraction. (sidebar- sorry I got off track) Anyway, what really works for me is from intro. The line “And my true self is bare” hooked me emotionally to the point, that I dare not put it down. The classic tale of boy meets girl, and but girl wants to play it cool. That's so funny to me. Makes me curious how did boy play it. Did he play it cool too? Or was he over the top and the kind of guy that women watch like television,”what will he do next”. That too does not have to be answered. To be a good poet the writer must have certain skills that encourage people to read., you do that on a respectable scale that also provides you to grow and develop that skill! When I read, I get questions. Some of them get answered, and some don't. Some times I'm at fault (detail freak), and other times the writer does not fulfill their obligations. I explored the question, does the boy always get the girl? Yeah right. That’s what makes your ending vague for me. It could be a ploy? If I was to look a little deeper into this and I’m just taking a stab in the dark, I would also say there is a little more to this crush than what meets the eye.“I know you” What if was said literally, and you knew this guy from family conversation and stories, or maybe even photos.How do you know him? Yeah free food gave it away for me. They serve free food at family reunions. You got introduced and it probably went like this “Ameena have you met your cousin Troy or Ray or Abraham, and you played it cool cause you didn’t want your cousin or anybody else in your family to know you had a crush on your own cousin. That may explain the language used in this piece and in the end I'm still guessing. Do you want that for the reader. If it is a kissing cousin, you can let us in. My own personal experience with it was very innocent. We just didn't no any better. I just never had the courage to write a poem about it. I hope I’m right. I like being right about stuff like this. Witty author writes a clever poem, and fools the entire ENGLISH (honors) class, but me. I'm probably wrong though, it's probably about some rock star, famous, author or trip you took with a group? Nonetheless that sort of intrigue made this poem so much fun. It's nice to have a gift that the reader can get that interactive vibe that you gave to me.