Critique of Alana's Poem

As soon as we see Alana’s Poem, Dark Spots, we can tell there is no consistent structure to the lines, and there is only one stanza. We can tell right off the bat there are a lot of metaphors and comparisons. There’s somewhat of a story throughout the poem that begins with pain, but ends with somewhat of a recovery.

This poem works with metaphors well, and has somewhat of a narrative, which I like. I like how the metaphors convey precisely how she feels in some lines. The first line, right off the bat, was really good in clueing the reader in to how bad her memories were. Alana also uses some very specific details that can, to someone who can relate, open the door to a whole other realm of understanding. She doesn’t dilly dally and gets straight to the point, while still not being too obvious with the meaning of her poem. Other lines peak the reader’s curiosity, like the girl at the bar, and the corpse on the pavement, rolling back her eyes. I’m sure there’s something here that can be understood at a deeper level.