caitlin's review on tommy's poem for workshop

i love the way the first line reminds me of edgar allen poe's style (with the way you chose three words that all begin with the letter C). though it may have been a little too graphic, i actually think line four was a good description- it definetly gave me a clear picture and feel for the setting in your poem. there were really no concrete details, but i'm pretty sure i still grasp the general meaning in your work- it's a very hot summer day and you want to play but you do not have available friends/activities so you stay inside.