caitlin's critique for ameena's workshop poem

i feel as though the poem itself has a beautiful voice. it reminds me of the movies, actually, depicting long lost loves that no one acted upon yet they stay alive in each individual. the last two lines were very strong and full of meaning- i loved them. lines 10-15 gave me a very clear picture- not only of the time/place/weather under which the two of you met, but also where the two of you fit in with the masses (line four suggests many people around you in Georgia smoked, though you do not, because smokers would describe chain smoking as a good day- not chaos. in line ten you also added you hate the south, hinting that you do not feel as though you belong there, much like the boy you have a crush on. He lives in new york, as you stated in line seven).  overall, i get a very clear, consistent picture and flowing story. perhaps, to make the reader better understand why you are so attracted to this particular man, you could add his description.