Caitlin’s poem, Utopia, has a title very descriptive of the poem’s content. After reading it, I found that it was simply about a wished utopia that either doesn’t exist or is far removed from the entire scope of reality. Unfortunately, it was very vague, for me, and beyond this summation, I don’t have much of anything to say regarding the meaning.
Critically, this poem is shallow in detail. At least to my perspective. It talks about a utopia, and that, seemingly, it doesn’t really exist. It’s a rather hopeless sounding poem. But beyond that, it doesn’t lend an alternate meaning, or any kind of special quality that separates it from other poems. Neither does it have any concrete details. I feel like, when reading this poem, my mind is floating around. What I want is to feel tethered to reality, to something with some substance. Whatever this poem is about, it could have been done in a more concrete way. For example, if your poem were about being a mother whose baby died, then instead of talking about the feelings, you can talk about the moment you got the news. Or the most profound moment in that loss.
I just feel like the topic of the poem has a lot of potential with more concrete details. I was also really confused by line “But with evil intentions I conspire.” I don’t know why this line is in the poem. It really has no partnering line that lends a context as to why it’s there. Line 11 starts with the word ‘for’, which means because. So you conspire with evil intentions because when you wake, your journey ends and your boring life begins again. I just don’t understand what this means.
All in all, I would adapt the poem’s topic to more substantial grounds; that is, a concrete place, and then use little details to evoke some emotion in us.
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