Tracy's Review of Amber's and Kenny's poems

Amber’s Poem, ‘Sitting in Stillness’, is about an abused woman waiting for her husband to come home. Most of the poem was dramatic and sad. There were a few things I did not understand and thought either they should be expanded upon. The basis of the poem, the innate emotion was conveyed but it seemed like it could have been fleshed out more. I understand that sometimes a poem does not need to be long to be good, and this one has the potential to be one of those. If she was strong and amused, why and how does she break? Who is the boy and why does he whisper something ‘unintelligent’? A better word may have been: dense, brainless, foolish, moronic, witless, imbecilic, simple, or inane. I was just more disappointed that it was so short and that it seems as though Amber was hesitant to put in a few lines that she had or wanted to. It’s as though she had so much more she wanted to add.

Kenny’s poem, ’A Moment N Ur Eyes’, was about love. It flowed like song lyrics. I liked the repetitive verse. I liked some of the imagery it evoked. I had a particularly difficult time reading Kenny’s poem because of the text message spelling and it would have flowed better for me if that wasn’t an issue. Some of the lines I had a difficult time comprehending. I liked the line, ‘I don’t care if it’s an ancient myth or popular folklore’. I do not understand this line, ‘Glancing & re-glancing just 2 keep wet N ur eyes’.