Kenneth's Critique of Claire's Poem

Taking a Sit in the Park by Clare McCauley
“Taking a Sit in the Park,” by Clare McCauley is about a person who has a monologue about being bitten by a mosquito. That was quite awesome—a monologue about a mosquito. It has an affectionate tone to it; if not affection, then sarcasm. I would definitely keep that a direction in this poem. She suggests that the last two lines be changed. I agree and perhaps this would be her fancy: “stealth upon trees of skin” and “unseen, retreating into the various forests of men.”