Jackies Reflections for sam and clare

Clare’s Poem

I really enjoyed the idea of Clare’s poem. Everyone knows what it is like to be eaten alive by bugs in late august and everyone hates it. Clare did a good job of making the readers look at bugs in a more humane way. She did this by using lines such as “All you can eat buffet” or “Skin salad junkies”. Clare did a great job of making the reader almost feel sorry for these insects that feed off of our skin all summer long by using lines like “Your poor”, “You’re hungry”. The only suggestions I have is to put the “I will” lines either at the beginning or end of the poem. It seemed to me that those lines through off the poems rhythm but those lines definitely fit into the poem; I’m just not so sure they fit in at that point.

Sam’s poem

I loved Sam’s poem because it makes me feel like I’m not the only one working my ass off all the time. I really liked how he picked “The day is not done” to use repetition with. I also really liked the lines sam used to compare his day with other people or things such as “A fly on a web has more time to waste” “A wagon has more luxuries” “ A slave spends less time working” and “A cancer patient has more luck than me”. My only suggestions would to add in more about his work day to get a better idea of what work is being done and to add a different ending to make it seem like his day is done but it will start all over again tomorrow