the intimacy of maleness/femaleness, united. The subject is beautiful and realistic. As this poem begins ...this word is used all to often rendering it meaningless and insignificant...speaks to the overuse of the word Love. In the second stanza ...it is nothing to be taken for granted...builds upon the meaning of the first stanza. The third stanza describes there is a spiritual realm included within-...a connection transcending the physical plain...The fourth stanza exemplifies further the dimension of concreteness, ...fullness of the heart... A lovely, flowing collection of images bring this reader to a place of priceless serenity. This solace is described in detail ...what humankind restlessly seeks...,suggesting that such is rare and difficult to find and to keep. The technique of compare/contrast used in the eighth stanza further intensifies the subject of Yin and Yang. This reader would have concluded with the eleventh stanza, using that as the ninth and final stanza. This is because the poem moves from we to I in an clumsy way and this reader thinks the ninth and tenth stanzas take away from the overall beauty of the Oneness theme and are not necessary. What a wonderful theme!
Monday, September 21, 2009
Mary's Review of Tracy's Poem
The title and subject Liquid Soul is wonderful. Rather than using the cliche Love, Tracy uses a metaphor to describe 
the intimacy of maleness/femaleness, united. The subject is beautiful and realistic. As this poem begins ...this word is used all to often rendering it meaningless and insignificant...speaks to the overuse of the word Love. In the second stanza ...it is nothing to be taken for granted...builds upon the meaning of the first stanza. The third stanza describes there is a spiritual realm included within-...a connection transcending the physical plain...The fourth stanza exemplifies further the dimension of concreteness, ...fullness of the heart... A lovely, flowing collection of images bring this reader to a place of priceless serenity. This solace is described in detail ...what humankind restlessly seeks...,suggesting that such is rare and difficult to find and to keep. The technique of compare/contrast used in the eighth stanza further intensifies the subject of Yin and Yang. This reader would have concluded with the eleventh stanza, using that as the ninth and final stanza. This is because the poem moves from we to I in an clumsy way and this reader thinks the ninth and tenth stanzas take away from the overall beauty of the Oneness theme and are not necessary. What a wonderful theme!
the intimacy of maleness/femaleness, united. The subject is beautiful and realistic. As this poem begins ...this word is used all to often rendering it meaningless and insignificant...speaks to the overuse of the word Love. In the second stanza ...it is nothing to be taken for granted...builds upon the meaning of the first stanza. The third stanza describes there is a spiritual realm included within-...a connection transcending the physical plain...The fourth stanza exemplifies further the dimension of concreteness, ...fullness of the heart... A lovely, flowing collection of images bring this reader to a place of priceless serenity. This solace is described in detail ...what humankind restlessly seeks...,suggesting that such is rare and difficult to find and to keep. The technique of compare/contrast used in the eighth stanza further intensifies the subject of Yin and Yang. This reader would have concluded with the eleventh stanza, using that as the ninth and final stanza. This is because the poem moves from we to I in an clumsy way and this reader thinks the ninth and tenth stanzas take away from the overall beauty of the Oneness theme and are not necessary. What a wonderful theme!
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