Joann's Review of Jackie's and Sam's Poem

Those People By: Jackie Quattrochi
This poem, “Those People” I really enjoy a lot. While reading your poem I found myself thinking about someone whom I may have seen on the street and recognized them as well as my old friends from middle/ high school. I think you did a great job with your language and imagery. For example, my favorite line is “Those people, they fade from our minds, as the sun fades from the sky at dusk…” I find that particular line to be the most strong and compelling. The only thing I would change is maybe separating each thought into stanza s or paragraphs before you re-say the line “Those People.” I really think you did a great job with this poem and I enjoyed reading it.



The Day is Not Done By: Sam Weber
While reading this poem, I felt like I was with you on your way to work, your work day and your true feelings. I liked how you described how you felt waking up. The language you used about how much you want the day to be done and how much you despise what you do is also very strong. Lastly, the only thing I would change is the line, “Dumb ass driver tests my reaction time”, I would add a different adjective for the driver that cut you off and made you angry on your way home. But I did like how short and to the point it was, and I find it to be very descriptive too.