The no-rhyming quality of this work is appealing. The phrases which contain like a 69 tour the Vietnam
War reference discomfort. The war theme is consistently repeated. These themes hint that passion may be
associated with violence. Intense passion often is. Reference to the wrinkles...the corners of my face breaking
the portrait.. is descriptive and sensational. Opening lines we've all heard what sticks and stones can and
cannot do...and...No pain,no gain and it's the same for taboo describe inner turmoil of the I of whom the
is referring, his subject again suggest pain. I am the prisoner of UR kaleidoscope...caught in chosshairs...
UR stare...jails...imply pain/discomfort as well. The U and 2 , etc., are distracting. This reader would have
preferred a the flowing written words, you and two. Reading this poem requires more thought and
consideration than most poems - which may not appeal to the general public.
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