Jackies Review for Kenny

A moment and your eyes is a well contrasted poem, minus grammatical errors about soul mates. Kenneth does a great job of creating images while giving the reader the feeling of longing, lust, and love. Using sentences such as “Moonlight strikes me in the river…” creates great visuals. Kenneth also repeats the same lines “I won’t move; I’ll be still trying not to shake-when my bones don’t break, I want some more…. And never can a portrait be better than the watercolors that you see in me”. The poem is about loving, understanding, and caring for someone as a lover and a friend.

Kenneth did a great job of illustrating visuals for his readers by using words such as “brush on canvas”, “Vietnam War”, “lays effortless”, “watercolors”, and “setting of the beach”. Kenneth’s poem is intriguing and interesting because of these visuals he presents to the readers. It makes the readers feel much more involved in the poem and presents the mood or theme of his poem much more clearly. The poem also did a great job at emphasizing certain points. Kenneth took five lines of his poem and repeated them seven times. With this repetition Kenneth does a great job at making the reader understand his obsession and longing for what he “wants more”. I believe the fact that what lines he repeats is about wants more is ironic to the fact that he writes these lines over and over again which is good symbolism. Some suggestion for Kenneth would be to make the poem a little shorter. Repeating the five lines is a little much and it made me get a little bored since I seemed to know which five lines were coming up by the end. Also since the poem was extensive I felt as if Kenneth had more than one idea to this poem and all the ideas were kind of jumbled together. He talks much of war, then painting, rivers and oceans. I felt overwhelmed once in awhile, felt that there was a lot going on at once. Overall I enjoyed the poem very much.