Kenneth's Critique of Jaclyn's Poem

Those People by Jaclyn Quatttrochi
“Those People” are about noticing the people that exist but you do not know. That point was captured perfectly with all of the examples written like the people who ride past you on their motorcycles. This poem has to be restructured to make linear the ideas that it provokes and the examples it uses as proof. The end of the poem is much unfinished and it goes off a cliff and it is just in midair. Perhaps the whole poem can be reevaluated to give it direction just to finish it—if only to finish the poem. I really was inspired by the pointing to subtleties. She shows how to take nothing for granted and perpetuated thought well. This is one of the strengths that I found to stand out and I hope she continues in the way of social poems.
Some ideas for finishing the poem are to relate one or all of “those people” to someone personally in her life. I think that a “real” touch would put a self-emphasis on the poem. Another strong point would be to “bottom-line” it as to give the poem visual finish that easily is seen by the reader.