Joann Adamczyk's Review of Rhiannon, Ben and Amber's Short Stories

Mama By Rhiannon Feehly

I loved this story and the way it's foreshadowed ,and the way the character is recreating the memories in her mind of her mother. I loved how the reflections of this story as if it's her dreams after she receives the morphine. This is a very touching story about how a cancer patient feels in the hospital sick with cancer. I also think you did a fantastic job with Olivia's voice voice and character. The only thing I would change is maybe describe physical features of Olivia's mother and daughter. Also, I wold create more of a character back round and why were reading this story and how is important.i do like this story and how emotional it is.

Untitled By: Ben Middleton

This story I think is very emotional, and really great. I loved your descriptions and how Timmy, the main character, felt a void in his life from a game of checkers. I liked it because of the character development and how Timmy became a changed person, and grew more mature by having a puppy. After Timmy adopted the it seemed to me that he knew a game of checkers wasn't everything in his life. He also became more friendly and outgoing with his puppy, which makes me think that Timmy did in fact learn something. Lastly, I liked how this story evolved and also the end i think is the best. Overall, I don't have any corrections. I think it's perfect just the way it is as a life changing story.

Night Time With Daddy By: Amber Schleicher

I love how this story lives in the moment of recreating how much the main character loves her father. I also like how there is a generations in the story and how the main character continues the tradition of reading to her daughter. I also think it's the most meaningful that the main character in the only one who visit's her father's headstone, and she had a different perspective of her father than her mother. I also like how we can all relate to this story in some way or perspective. The only thing I would add is a scene of dialogue with the main character and her mother talking about their father/ husband and how each other can face their fears. I would also like to know what stories they read together at night, and what she felt. I do like this story a lot and how meaningful it is.