Jaclyn Quattrochi

Kizzier – 209

10/8/09

Jackie’s Review on Jaime

I enjoyed Jaime’s poem a lot. It reminded me of the feeling I get when I watch/ read into the wind. Having to be and act a certain way because you are told to. Because if you don’t you are not considered normal or a part of society. Not fitting in. I really enjoyed the lines “Living only to dream, If not having to dream.” I also really liked the lines “Shoved into my mold.” The idea of the poem I believe is a good topic for a poem. I feel that everyone at one point of another feels that they have to be or act a certain way to feel that they are a productive member of society. The only suggestions I have for Jaime is that the she could have went into more detail of where she is or when she mostly feels that she has to be a productive member of society. It is a great poem but I would have liked more detail. Other than that I thought overall it was a great poem and a great idea for the poem. She made it flow very well and it all seemed to go together.

Jackie’s review on Ben’s poem

I love, love, love Ben’s poem. I think I enjoyed it so much because every day on my way to school I see a homeless man and some days I give him money and other days I speed away. I guess it always depends on my mood, but for about an hour or so after I drive away from him I think about why he is homeless, is it because she chose to be, or is it because he doesn’t have a choice. I think it is so interesting to see how fast people judge the homeless. I really enjoyed the lines “As he nears you car fear builds within you”. It is so true but no one wants to say it. I think Ben picked an awesome idea for his poem. The only suggestions I have to Ben is to make his lines shorter. I felt they were a little too long and that his lines would have more power is they were shortened up a little. Other wise it was a great poem and had everything it needed in it. I really enjoyed the questions at the end. It makes the reader sit and ponder and even maybe second guess their actions the next time they pull up to the homeless.

Jackie’s review on Aliza’s poem

I enjoyed Aliza’s poem because everyone know what it is like to inherit certain traits and characteristics from our parents that maybe we don’t want to have or maybe we do. I really enjoyed the lines “I swear it’s those windmills spinning in your eyes.” It’s interesting how she goes about this poem saying how she is being hypnotized. I have felt many times that my mother has brain washed me to be and think like her, but it is good when someone can recognize this happening to themselves. I felt that the lines “And it scares me to think, that disloyalty is not the only heritable trait you have.” I enjoyed it because it brings you to the idea that some of the things that are portrayed in Aliza’s character that she gets from her mother she enjoyed but there are other things she might not like. Over all I thought it was a great poem. The only thing I would suggest for Aliza is to go into more detail about what the other heritable traits “you” have maybe. I would like to hear more about them. Over all it was a great poem and I really enjoyed reading it.