Jackie's review on Ben's short story

Jackie’s review for Ben’s Short Story
Ben’s short story was about a bratty kid who didn’t have many friends. This kid was an amazing checkers player who was very arrogant about his checker skills. Eventually the kid loses to a younger kid and gets very angry. Since he stopped playing checkers he started to become very sad so his parents bought him a puppy. The puppy helped the boy understand about friendships so the boy found the kid that beat him at checkers and they became friends. I was surprised to see that Ben wrote a story like this. I really liked the beginning and the idea of the puppy. I also liked how Ben laid out the scene of central park for us and then went into the idea of the bratty kid playing checkers. The imagery Ben used was really powerful. The only suggestions I have for Ben is that not to rush the end so much. I felt that out of know where this kid got a puppy and it changed his entire way of thinking way to quickly compared to the first part of the story. Overall I really enjoyed the short story, especially the puppy part.