Aliza's Review of Claire's poem

Taking a sit in the park depicts the internal dialogue of a girl being bitten by mosquitoes who, as the poem progresses, begins to perceive herself not as the victim of these insects, but as their protector, the mosquito martyr, perhaps, willing to sacrifice a little comfort and a bit of blood to indulge a few innocent freeloaders. This poem is about finding a sense of kinship with the world, and everything in it, even mosquitoes. This is a great topic, that indescribable feeling that comes on, often inexplicably, when you just know that you’re a part of everything around you, that you’re just connected in some awesome way. I like what this poem has to say, and for the most part, the simplicity with which it is said—conversations with little bugs can say a lot more about life, than conversations about life can. In terms of revision, I think you should expand the first part and give the reader a better sense of your context before launching into the more fantastical second half. The other thing I found confusing was that mosquitoes don’t eat skin, but I’m thinking maybe poetic license covers that one?