Review of Jackie’s story

Jackie’s story was about a girl riding the North Central Trail on a bike. Problem was, the girl was a chain smoker and probably not in the best shape. In the beginning of the story, I was convinced that the narrator wouldn’t make the trip. I was sure she would give up. To my surprise, Jackie takes through the entire bike ride, including every complaint. I can imagine myself in the story, so I was able to relate. I wish the story was a little more descriptive. I like following the narrator’s thoughts through the story and I’d like to see a little more of that.

Review of Kenny’s story

Kenny’s story is a little confusing to me. It’s kind of hard to imagine. I don’t understand how, when his father left, he was able to stash cologne and put it on. It comes off as the father has been gone for 58 months, but the child is still wearing diapers. It’s a little strange to imagine. I like the idea of the story, but I think it’s a little confusing. If he’s reflecting, I can’t tell. Maybe a little more detail about how old the narrator really is would add some clarity to the story. I like the story behind the cologne, but still don’t understand how a 58 month child would stash a bottle of it in his diaper.