A review of “Night time with Daddy”

Overall, I like the idea of the story. The intro is nice, but I would like to know a little more about the actual story time before the death of the narrator’s father. The story flows, but maybe too quickly. There isn’t enough meat to the story to draw any real conclusions. I’d also enjoy seeing more at the cemetery with a conversation with the narrator’s dead father at his gravesite. I like the idea that she visits the grave on his birthday, but again, I’d like to see a little more there. All in all, I think the idea is a great idea for a short story, but I’d like to see a little more of the narrator talking about the story time and more at the cemetery.