Mia's Critique of Holden's Poem.

I like how this poem tells a story in a sense and I can almost put in a vision what is going on. I especially like the first stanza and how you say that it’ll be one night that we all have to sleep and close our eyes not even peeping, because I got the feeling that our days are something that we cannot hold onto no matter how hard we try, it’s something that goes on whether we like it or not. I also like how the times that are said in the poem gives the story sort of a chronological feelings with everything that is going on in this poem, so I thought that was a good touch. I also feel like there is this way bigger meaning behind this poem that I am trying to crack, but as many times that I may read it I can never fully grasp what it is, which I think is pretty cool because every time I read it its keeping me on my toes trying to figure out what it is. I could imagine a kid looking for their father or even take into the perspective of you talking about God. Or maybe I’m just trying to be too literal about it. Either way I like the idea. Although the poem has a few concrete images like shutting your eyes without even a peep or it turning midnight and your eyes are really getting heavy, that the poem overall seems a bit abstract to me. Especially in the third stanza, in the second line “How could you not wake up if you fall asleep? Surely the job is his” I was thrown off a little bit, I wasn’t really understanding exactly where that line came from. I think that a little more detail, concrete, would make the poem a little better. I also think that by keeping the poem in one person, first or second, would make it more consistant because it gets a bit confusing in the beginning.