Holden,

This poem is about a person questioning their religion. I love the creativity in this poem. The first stanza was really interesting to me, it was the only one to rhyme which really stood out to me. The last line “the night you’ll try to keep” made me think of the prayer my mom taught me to say if I was little…” Now I lay me down to sleep, I pray the Lord my soul to keep”. So it is definitely relatable as well. I almost felt as if it was religious, but you were questioning it in line five “When you look for and ask for the one you call your father”. To me it did not seem like you were actually talking about your father and with the way you said it seemed as though you were unsure of it. I like that because we can see something about you that we wouldn’t get to outside of the poem. The structure is also great, the way the stanzas are separated make it seem like it is a story. I love your diction also, you repeat “Will” constantly which is great because it adds certainty to your poem…I would consider taking out the words “try” it takes away from the poem in my opinion.

The confidence in the last line is awesome!

-Meghan