Dennis Johnson

English 209

9\21/2011

                                                                                Critique of Dark Spots

The poem Dark Spots begins with a realistic, thought provoking, vivid, on the edge description of imagery that segues into the body that produces a subjective prose. It places the reader in a scene toward the middle-end which could have been placed at the beginning for more continuity.  My perverse will automatically attracts to the author and the deeper meaning in which she is trying convey. Her criteria established credibility at her own pace that was easy to follow but maintained its integrity.  The author released something deep within that was troubling, that the reader could easily connect to and actually relate to the troubling subjective material.  The pace was fast; and properly addressed! “I know that the mind is the enemy” is a clear example of the energy projected throughout the poem. It was felt, and it developed an attitude of remorse and depression.  The dreamy metaphors such as “I woke up the other night gasping for air” again represented strong structure. Throughout the entire the poem the reader delved in an array of emotions from remorse to adulation and was thafted back into the pains of reality. If forced to make a suggestion, I would conceive in the structure. Perhaps instead of the line “I love my existence” would have been more appreciated if it was delivered toward the beginning.

                    Dennis Johnson  Critique of the poem Best Friend by Megan

I really enjoyed the poem Best Friend as I thought it was a delightful, uplifting poem that left me with a sense of hope. The poems intention was honest and forthcoming and that projected an authentic appeal. Lines like “You taught me to forgive, to be free,” expressed the well examined emotions that were release in a very rheumatic tone. I also thought the author did a wonderful job with clarity and organization. The subject of the poem was about two best friends that apparently went their separate ways. It was filled with commitment, and promise for the future. The author kept the structure and maintained the same tone throughout. My only suggestion is to try to show examples instead of telling them. There was a lot of thought provoking lines that truly looked into the wide range of friendship and where it can take you. It left me feeling optiomistic.