Asphalt Gridiron is a first person narrative about a child hood football game in Texas. The kids in
The story play in the street and in the end the narrator’s team wins the game by a touchdown as the sun sets. This story is very detailed which I like a lot. Childhood stories are a great way to connect with the reader because most people feel very strongly about their child hood. Whether they look back on it fondly or whether they look back on it agony most people look back on their childhood. I don’t think there is anyone who honestly feels indifferent about their childhood. For reediting I would suggest removing some of the metaphors he used in the story. I have nothing against the metaphors in and of themselves but in my opinion most metaphor in fiction just feels a little campy. I would also try to explain why this particular game was important to the character. I think there needs to be further character development in the story.
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