Reviews for this week.

Mia:

What it’s about: a drunken night where she goes to look at a skyline. She realized that she is trapped in her parents plan and decides to move to New York.

What I like:

- Background

- interest

- Setting/plot

Things to consider

- Add more to her point of change, too easy.

- Explain more about the two contrasts (skylines)

- Add paragraphs!

I really like this a lot! Good job! J

Reig:

What it’s about: A man who is dating his teacher. The fear that the teacher has about him going away to West Virginia University.

What I like:

- The Twist at the end

- The plot

- The emotion used throughout the story

Things to consider:

- Adding more scenes

- Setting a faster pace

- Giving more background as you go along

- What was your change?

I love how this is different from all of the other short stories we read. It is serious but funny at the same time. It stands out and I really love that about it. Good job! J

Jenel

What it’s about: A women who is being physically abused by her husband. She is in the process of standing up for herself and leaving.

What I like:

- The plot

- Her bravery and how you can see Daphne’s emotions easily

- The name Daphne! J

Things to consider:

- Adding more background on her brother.

- More about her husband

This gave me chills! It is such a good story, you are so creative. I want to read