review of ameena

Ameena’s story, Praying and Plotting, tells the story of a woman named Carrol who murders her husband and is arrested at his funeral. She has little remorse for her deed but will have to face the law. Ameenas story has good subject matter and is written in a clear matter. She has included some good details like here. The moment of her following the pallbearers outside is told well. I think what ameena could do for revision is use more particular words for example instead of saying “Midwestern town” she could name a town in the Midwest. Instead of saying “food-filled dish” you could say “spaghetti filled dish” or some other particular food. This is a good plot for a story but i want the characters to be developed further so I can care more about whether or not they live or die, cry or smile, or go to jail or get beaten. I think this story needs to be longer in order to make the story more powerful.